User blog comment:SupremeVegeta15/My Version/@comment-3000576-20111123000049

I'm going to do something that nobody below me ever gave on this blog: Gentle Advice.

Get a beta-reader. And I mean from somebody on this wiki (not me. I'm bad at this kind of thing), not just one of your family members/friends.

And another note: You always say "This one will be better", but, even if it is better (only by a margin), it's still not good. At LEAST post one part of the story.