User blog:Octopus Garden/Octopus Garden's Reviews

Hi everyone! I haven't written much yet but I do want to read some more of the great fanons on this website, so I will be starting a review blog. I'm just doing this so I can keep track of my thoughts on the different fanons I read and it will also give me an incentive to read more fanons. I will start with the Featured Fanons and then I will do requested stories.

I will rank stories from F to A+. Nothing fancy about it!

Pros

 * This fanon takes a serious look at a character who's usually just seen as comic relief. I like the deeper, emotional aspect this fanon takes on an otherwise two-dimensional character.
 * Beautiful writing. The writing is detailed, sensory, and gives a very romanticized view of something as morbid as cutting. The writing is at its peak with lines like "the slight coppery tang slid across her taste buds like the rarest of delicacies".
 * The contrast between ChiChi's emotional life and her maternal life is fascinating, really, and it shows a great deal about her character through a very simplistic exchange. It's the ability to show rather than tell that defines this story.

Cons
Brief Summary: Depiction in Red is a masterfully written story that displays a very morbid act in a beautiful way. It shows strong characterization and powerful storytelling abilities. However, had the author fleshed out ChiChi's emotions more so than just her actions, it would have brought the story to a whole new level.
 * The story should have focussed a bit more on ChiChi's reasoning behind cutting herself rather than the cutting itself. That's where the angst should've come from, not from the gore and the razorblade.
 * The dialog between Gohan and ChiChi feels a bit rushed. It doesn't seem like ChiChi to just leave like that, and it would have helped for them to have a complete conversation that led to Gohan's closing sentiments.

Rating: A