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 * That's okay. I wasn't expecting anything else. But, for reference, I tried to write it in more of a runic style to fit the mythological context of the story, which is, in part, why it may have failed in clarity of sentences.

Okay. I hope you aren't mad or taking offense to this, it's just I had a hard time explaining that con because of how widespread (IMO) it was. I just think that, perhaps at least, you could not reuse uncommon words a lot and/or make sentences shorter/flow together more. As I said before I'm not exactly certain with this one.


 * Korin's personality is neverreally shown in full; all we ever do see by him is him walking around wisecracking and whatnot. However, I doubt that this is his genuine personality, given that he's not going to be guardian of the world for no reason. Kami probably chose him due to this wisdom; more on that later.

Okay. I know that Korin's real personality wasn't really shown in the anime/manga, it's just I found it a bit weird with the personality that you chose for him. It's not wrong in and of itself, just that I would do something different in that position. I know that prolly wasn't helpful...


 * I don't explicitly state this, I guess. The main reason he does it is that you must remember he is a highly religious person, as is his tribe. Because of this, when he sees a mean guy attacking god, he attacks the mean guy, hence why he was shouting loyalties to his religion when he attacked the Makyan. Maybe that could've been more clear, Iono, I intended for that to be somewhat subtle from the beginning.

No, it makes sense. It was my fault for not being able to pick up the subtleties of it. I'll remove that con now.


 * Well, the tale is inspired by King Arthur and whatnot, so inferences were to be expected to be made here. In essence, though, Korin, when he was born, was chosen to take this staff, but had to travel around and do stuff first too. That's why I shed so little light on his early life; he didn't have one, really. He was more or less poofed into existance by Kami, who wanted him to take the cane and all that. As this was, in and of itself, the reason for his existance, he naturally felt comfortable when taking the position, which is why he chose to follow orders.

Okay. This makes sense to me now that you explained it... however I'd still say that it could have been a wee bit better to have inferred a bit of this whole Kami-created-Korin-for-some-destiny in the text, as I had no inclination of it as I read.

Hoped that helped. -KidVegeta