User blog comment:Princeofallsalads/Favorite Fanfic/@comment-1821137-20101028214639/@comment-1932451-20101028223322

Well for example you make Vegeta transform into a Super Saiyan against Frieza. Then at the world martial arts tournament, Kakarot turns into a Super Saiyan and Vegeta can't even get a hit in. Also, you should definetely go into more depth about the major battles. Like don't just list them like Goku lost against vegeta the gohan beat vegeta when he went false super saiyan then vegeta turned super saiyan and killed frieza then the martial arts tournament happened. Also make the battles longer and more exciting, don't just say Gohan and trunks powered up but gohan punched trunks and the battle was over. Finally, don't make super saiyan levels easy to achieve. What I mean is don't make Goku turn super saiyan 2, 3 and 4 all in the same battle, that is just illogicle.