User blog:Hyper Zergling/HZ's Reviews

After Desctructivedisk pestered asked me to make a review blog, I decided to. But be warned, it won’t be updated very often, due to my personal life, and the fact that I have a lack of attention span, so reading horrendous fan fictions will take a long time.

Rating Categories:
 * KidVegeta Perfect
 * Destructivedisk Exceptional
 * Very Good
 * Mediocre
 * Below Mediocre
 * Pretty Bad
 * Supersaiyian11 Worst Possible

Note: It will be very unlikely that any of your fan fictions will lie in the upmost or worst category

More pros or cons may be added after I re-read each story

Pros

 * Very original
 * No overpowering
 * Humans now play a greater role
 * Canon characters keep their personalities

Cons

 * Tao is too “random.”
 * Tao should be dead, due to Super Buu. The explanation supplied, although possible, is insanely unlikely.
 * Fat Buu is out of existence.
 * Chiaotzu and Yajirobe beating the hypothetical Frieza
 * Dende would have understood the situation at hand and sacrificed himself.

Overall Rating
Very Good

Pros

 * Canon characters somewhat keep their personalities
 * Nothing above SSJ4

Cons

 * Terrible, terrible grammar and spelling, if not for my corrections, not to mention new additions also have poor grammar now
 * Story needs explaining
 * Descriptions are too straightforward and redundant, resulting in utter boredom
 * Pan getting mad at Krillin for hitting her during the tournament
 * Goten wouldn’t be pissed during his tournament fight with Trunks
 * Since when was Dragon Ball one word?

Overall Rating
Pretty Bad

Pros
I can't think of any at the moment

Cons

 * Lack of story development
 * Rewrite of something that already happened
 * Lack of spacing between many sentences and behind many commas
 * Lack of capitalization on many letters that should be capitalized, and capitalization on some letters that should not be capitalized
 * Image theft

Overall Rating
Pretty Bad

Pros

 * Good time frame to develop on

Cons

 * Power levels are higher than they should be

Overall Rating
Mediocre – Pretty Good

Pros

 * Disregarding canon issues, the backstory of Bruss could have been a good idea

Cons

 * Overpowering
 * No explanations for things that just don’t make sense
 * Minimal story development
 * Poor grammar/spelling
 * Image theft…again

Overall Rating
Pretty Bad

Pros

 * It actually made me laugh

Cons

 * In the section of Krillin and 18, is Marron Marron as in their daughter or Maron? Clarified, but still caused initial confusion
 * Not exactly a "fan fiction"

Overall Rating
Exceptional (for its intention)

Dragon Ball : NS by Raging Blast
Note: This review was done during the process of reading, so more points are pointed out.

Pros:

 * GT is disregarded

Cons:

 * The story unravels too suddenly.
 * “Vegeta,Trunks,Gohan,Krilin,Yamcha,Ciaotzu and Tien” You could’ve just typed “The rest of the Z Fighters”
 * Humans and saiyans being born of the same ancestor race
 * Goku wouldn’t just send his son into the line
 * Shenron teaching fusion
 * Broly’s power already rises by the second
 * The time thing in that world is illogical. If they beat Broly in 15 minutes in that world, then 15 minutes it is, since it’s 15 minutes relative to them.
 * Virtually all characters speak as though they are little kids. The quotes are not what many of them would say.
 * Goku and Trunks Fusion
 * Janemba
 * Other kind of fusion that exceeds fusion dance and Potara
 * US customary system instead of metric (100 miles); it’s Japan, not the US
 * The rest of the Z Fighters inexplicably learning signature techniques of others
 * Informal punctuation and capitalization
 * Some grammar and spelling problems
 * The idea of Xorcai was better Misunderstanding clarified

Overall Rating
Below Mediocre

Pros

 * Solid writing that did not bore me at all.
 * GT is disregarded
 * Master Roshi molesting 18...he would

Cons

 * Some cliches, such as the what happens with Turtle Jr. and the toxic darts in Roshi's traps
 * Use of the US customary system for measurements

Overall Rating
Exceptional

Next In Line

 * Dragon Ball Z : NS by Raging Blast
 * Dragon Ball Z: Futuristic Tales by NomadMusik
 * DragonBall:Saiyan Fury by GHdude, RFyle11, and Ss4mott