User blog comment:NomadMusik/Reviews... as they fall, I rise./@comment-3122168-20110626194900

Wowzers! I'm not going to go so far as to say that T:O is a fantastic fic, as, well, it does have a lot of problems, but I think that you managed to state a bunch of cons which were completely and totally wrong. Anywho, here's my rebuttal!


 * The flashback dialogue is a play's/opera's/roleplay's dialogue. Minor, but still note worthy.

Yeah, it is. Don't see how that's a bad thing at all, really.


 * How the hell does Yamcha know how to fly a spaceship?

This one actually takes a bit of inference ability to get. I know, I shouldn't expect so much from a humble reader like yourself. Let's think here for a moment: if he was chosen to test-drive the spaceship, would the Briefs family not, even for a second, think to teach him how to drive the ship. It's safe to say that they would give him training before sending him off to space like that, given that they, you know, care about him.


 * Yamcha's POV. It's a bad idea to switch styles without any notice to the reader.

Sorry about that one. I had to remember that not all the readers are smart enough to figure out who's talking. I'll make sure to spoonfeed every detail to the reader from now on!


 * Oh, and Yamcha being an alcoholic. He's prolly a bajillionaire to begin with, so what kind of problems does he have?
 * Bulma leaving him doesn't count. If he missed her so much, he wouldn't have been a ladies man. So, Yamcha is OOC.

This is the epitome of stupidity right here, folks. Are you seriously trying to propose that rich people don't drink? That Yamcha might drink occasionally to get over his loneliness in life, amidst his wallowing in one-night stands and relationships? Look at Charlie Sheen, for example. He's rich, doesn't have any problems, so he won't drink, right? owait, he's the alcoholic of the century. When it comes to him ranting about Bulma, that's not genuine; that's simply his own wastedness causing ancient feelings to unsurface themselves. You might notice that she's, ya know, never mentioned when Yamcha isn't drunk. Lastly, I never state that Yamcha is an alcoholic to begin with. He just got drunk one night. Good job making an inference out of nothing, but failing to make one out of anything else in the entirety of the story.


 * Great grammar doesn't mean perfect. What does Yamcha mean when he said: "What did they about that when they were telling me how to drive this ship?"

Okay, cool. I made a grammar mistake. I left out the word "say" between the words "they" and "about". Guess this means I should just go die in a hole, because anything less than complete perfection is obviously not good enough.


 * Yamcha's grammar is even more OOC.

He's drunk. His grammar's going to be off. That's really a no-brainer right there.


 * About switching styles mid-chapter: Don't.

That's just blatantly shunning any type of creativity. Assuming that one has to remain with the same prose throughout an entire chapter is ridiculous. If I can't be creative, well, then, I don't see why I should bother writing a fanon to begin with.


 * Um... going back in time is a really bad plot device.

Don't see how doing something original is a bad idea.


 * Saiyans v. Bekks. Not really the best of wars.

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 * Kordar is really an arrogant version of yourself. Again, not the wisest thing to do.

No, he's an arrogant version of KV. Don't see how he has anything to do with me. Great job on reading the story!


 * Not sure if this was intentional, but Nuzeel is a redneck version of myself and SuperFusion combined, mate.

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 * The Great Ape transformation was downright predictable. I would've prefered if Jimac died, and that would've been crappy, too.

W/o the great ape transformation, Yamcha would have destroyed all the Saiyans. It's just that simple. Furthermore, Jimac did die, so I dun even understand that closing part. And lastly, do you think that the great ape transormation being predictable might've had something to do with the fact that it was your second time reading the story?


 * "Just kidding." This story isn't a comedy, so just please never say that in this kind of a story.

If you think that I can't incorporate comedy into a serious story, well, then you're wrong. There's honestly nothing more to say about it, besides the fact that that con is just stupid.


 * Quickly shifting to Kordar's wife's child birth.
 * And then she died... This isn't the 1600's, people.

Yeah, you're right, it's not the 1600s. It's more like the 1000's, on an alien planet. I also don't see how shifting to her character's birth was bad.


 * Using Hyper Zergling's character was a bad idea... a very bad one.

That may be the only con I actually agree with.


 * King Cold now acts like a bigger, less androgynous version of Frieza. Wee.

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 * Kordar's death is nearly identical to Vegeta's death on Namek.

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 * You know how people usually inherit their parents' traits? Tien inherited nothing from Kordar nor his wife.

That's stupid as fuck right there. Tien got his arrogance, his fighting spirit, and his strength from Kordar. This could be explained by you never bothering to watch DB, because Tien acts very similar to Kordar before meeting Goku and Roshi.


 * Not sure if this is a pro or a con, but Tien's life is in an infinite loop.

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 * Oh, and the chapter titles are based off of song lyrics.

Keen observation! That was a good one right there! Nice job reading the trivia!

In short, I think the review was pure trash. Thanks for reading the story.