User blog comment:KidVegeta/KidVegeta's reviews/@comment--20110124205257

Hey I call explain every con in there:

Written by supersaiyian11.

What so just because i write it means it is bad now?

Premise of story.

I just rushed that part

Canon screw ups.

What if story where Vegeta was sent to earth instead of Goku.

Using my picture (which DD reuploaded)

I always use other peoples pictures

Terrible spelling.

Show me one sentence with bad spelling

Terrible grammar.

Give one example and I will be happy to fix it.

Terrible Plot expansion.

Your opinion

Descriptions of events seemed to be written by a drunk.

Your opinion

Vegeta would be 5 here, not a baby. I think he knows his own name.

This is complete role switch with Vegeta being as a baby and therefore five years before Frieza blew up Planet Vegeta

Random old man (grandpa gohan) is a stupid inclusion.

I needded to explain why he would not be adopted by Gohan like Goku was.

Vegeta wouldn't spend all day crawling to his ship again...

He was a baby. The ship was like a home to him

The identity crisis

What crisis? I never mentioned a crissis

If this "The saiyans are a proud warrior race. They go around the universe and destroy all living things a planet." is all you got out of watching dragon ball, then there is no hope.

I know more in fo about the saiyans but i just want a basic summary

Master Roshi's third person speech.

So saying your name one time is now Third person? Because if you pay attention the rest of his talk was in first person

Fight with Roshi was anything but "epic".

Like you I gave Vegeta a very high power level. His power level is 1000 as a baby. In DBZ it was said that Roshi had a power level of !39 or something like that. Vegeta had a higher power level so it is only logical he would win.

If Vegeta could kill roshi in 2 seconds, it would not take 5 months to kill everyone else.

Well considering the fact that there are billions of people on earth it might.

Why's Piccolo talking in third person now?

I wanted it to be dramatic

How the hell did a jar even get on the beach?

It was thrown into the ocean and washed up onto a beach

Even if it did, why would Vegeta find it?

Because he was on the same beach.

And more importantly why did he open it?

Because he was curious

And even after opening it, why did Vegeta immediately shoot a blast at the creature inside?

He only attacked Piccolo after he punched him

Shouldn't his curiosity... you know be consistent?

No he got mad after being punched and decided to attack Piccolo.

I'll tell you why. Because it's a horrible story. The worst ever. Thank god that it's so short because otherwise, I'd be ripping out my eyes by about now.

You try writing a story about Vegeta being sent to earth instead of Goku. Plus it only so short because i have decided to take a break from writing it in order to redo DBZ vs Yu-Gi-Oh. As soon as i am done rdoing that terrible story i wii continue V