User blog:Paradise Paradox/Matrixpretty Reviews

Theese are my reviews, not reviewing reviews by the way. I also do not claim to be better. My grammar and spelling will be a little different, because I'm British. I say Sulphur, you Americans say Sulfur.

Story Grades
 * 10.Toryima should make this!
 * 9.Rated A for Awesome!
 * 8.An Author's Apprentice.
 * 7.High Five.
 * 6.The Man, Maybe??
 * 5.Improve more.
 * 4.Ugh, Disgusting.
 * 3.What Are You A Monkey.
 * 2.RAGE! THIS SUCKS!
 * 1.Go Watch Dragonball GT and that's crap like your story, If not Crapper.

Pros

 * Like how you made King Vegeta in fear.
 * Good use of punctuation.
 * Like the Powerlevel
 * Like how you used Ledas relationship with his dad in depth.

Cons

 * About PL's, Vegeta's PL is 1500 and Ledas is 1300. Broly had a PL of 1000 and King Vegeta said he would uprise them, probably meaning they had lower. Idk.
 * Why is it called Prince Vegeta Saga, if Ledas is mentioned all lot of times.

Closing Comments
I like this,it was obvouisly the best I've ever read.

Grade:9

Pros

 * Expands on Chi-Chi's Character
 * Good use of puntuation
 * Good Speeling(Maybe)
 * Good Grammar(Maybe)

Cons

 * Chi-Chi sounds Emo.
 * I was hoping she'd tell Gohan to study in the end.

Closing Comments
You would have got a 9 or an 8, because of the Emo parts.

Grade:7

Pros

 * Created Characters Nice!
 * Love how you made a human beat Namekians and not just another.
 * Human and Saiyan Friendship

Cons

 * I know where you got Sharr Shan from.
 * Small Chapters
 * Don't use to much description.
 * Umm, I'm confused, if it's before Namek Saga, you've ruled out Goku being the 2nd Super Saiyan. (1st being the Original Super Saiyan)

Closing Comments
You've done good, but try improving more kid. I know your 11, which is great for your age with that story.

Grade:7