User blog:Destructivedisk/This is the End of All Origins

Yes, I've done it; I've actually finished a piece of work. Its name is Tien: Origins, and you can find it here. Whether it is good or not, I am unsure. But I need your feedback to know. So please, if you have a few spare minutes, I would be greatly appreciative if you could take a look at it and leave your thoughts below. I still want to know how I can improve so that my future pieces can only get better.

As a side note, I still have a few loose ends to fix up for the story. I need to make an explanations page, as the story is somewhat complex, a power levels page, and a page for Kordar and Beeter. Expect these to come within the next week. Thanks!