User blog comment:KidVegeta/KidVegeta's reviews/@comment-1821137-20110312125727

Can't really change that, so all cons on Gramms, Wording Spelling are ok.
 * Grammar, Wording Spelling Problems:

I understand, I was trying to keep realistic, but it wen't a little OOC for Goku. I don't even know how to make an interesting dialogue in this story.
 * Boring Dialogue:

I can't really say that this is a problem. Everything is in 3rd person as I can see, with some narration and quotes.
 * Constant changing of style of writing. Ie: sometimes it’s in 3rd person, other times in 2nd person:

There is lot to explain about bleach, even if I tried to keep it short, it would come out long, I'll try to fix this in future, but a valid con for sure.
 * Bleach explanation:

Shinigami means Death God. Goku would understand what Death God means.
 * Shinigami word:

Fixed that. In my language, you'd say someone is blue instead of someone is blonde. It was unintentional.
 * Hair turns blue:

Goku transforming was just showing off his powers. Only that. I realize that Goku would pwn him whenever he wants. Also, read the Trivia. Also, lowering the power of Goku is needed if I want to make those two fight properly. Ichigo was just cocky when he said "Distancing yourself is only meaningful...." He didn't overpower Goku in the end at all.
 * All OP cons:

Read my previous explanation.
 * Lameass ending: