User blog comment:SSWerty/Should ST be updated?/@comment-3122168-20110518020957/@comment-3097771-20110518054433

There's no need to get defensive or confrontational. I'm not here just to badger you; I'm trying to help. If you don't want that, that's fine. You're story won't be any better on its own, you're prologue has shown that enough. Making big long posts rambling on and sidestepping the issues will not serve to help your stories. Taking in feedback will. Otherwise, what's the point of revamping at all?

Now listen, I said your story flows terribly in my OoS review. I said that it can get awkward, it can get hard to understand. I've seen you do this before and now you're here doing it again. It needs to be fixed. When reading your prologue, that's what I got from it; choppy, awkward writing. You were trying to hard to impress the wiki, and it just didn't work. I have nothing against you as a person Werty, but really, you need to start acting more mature about this. Or just abandon this project. It's your choice. -KidVegeta