User blog comment:Destructivedisk/D-Disk Reviews/@comment-3097771-20110123062014/@comment-3122168-20110123161257


 * After the first mission, the story becomes lacking and monotonous

Well, honestly, I can't think of any specific examples. There aren't any genuine twists nor turns, and it's just straightforward fighting and training the entire way through.This is in part due to the prose, which makes everything just kinda go together without any real differentiators.
 * Nappa's just kind of annoying

Regardless, I don' like reading about an annoying character.


 * Benefactor appearances are limited

Review of this saga. Not the others.


 * Ledas is a minor Gary-Stu.

This really goes along with the lucky at the end thing. Even if he is not always the strongest, the story always seems to go in his favor, with him gaining mass amounts of power and such. Sure, the test was stupid, bu, just based on my own eye for it, Ledas is a minor Gary- Stu. Well, at the very least, it seems that way, because of the way you wrote it. Mentioning how he leaves the planet a split second before Frieza launched the ball.
 * Ledas gets way too lucky at the end.
 * The Saiyan revolt against Frieza felt very lacking

There was so much build-up to it, and then it just quickly ended with a brief punch. Didn't work for me.

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