User blog comment:SSWerty/The Swetty reviews/@comment-3122168-20110416201053

I've gone ahead and made a review of the prologue of your story. Don't take it personally.

Pros

 * Writing is typically above average

Cons

 * Very cliché dialog
 * Goku is very OOC… he would never kneel, as he doesn’t really understand customs, nor would he speak so eloquently
 * Prologue feels rushed

Closing comments: Although the writing is okay, the story as a whole still suffers from a great many problems. Rating: C-