User blog:Nimbus.69/Fanfic preview

HOLA WIKIA USERS. I AM NIMBUS.69 GIVING YOU A PREVIEW TO THE NEW FAN-FIC I AM WRITTING CALLED THE TERROR OF THE SAIYAJINS THAT IS IN WORKS I HAVE NO IDEA WHY I'M USING CAPS LOCK.

Well, now that we're done with that, I will start with the preview! This story has a unique format, being half drama half description...thingy...ok whatever! You'll see for yourself! This is just a small preview and I will add stuff as I write more, but for now, DEAL WITH IT

SO YAY PREVIEW TIME!!

It’s been five years since our hero, Son Goku, has defeated the evil demon king, Piccolo. Ever since then, our hero has married his love, his childhood friend Chi-Chi, and has lived in his home Mount Paouz. He’s even had a son, a little boy named Gohan, but Gohan isn’t like his father, not at all! In fact, he’s practically a complete opposite! See, Goku is a happy go-lucky naïve fight-loving hero, and Gohan…well, he’s a shy book-worm I guess you can say. He doesn’t like fighting, and would rather be studying like his mom wants him too. Well, back to the main thing. Son Goku and his son Gohan are getting ready to head to a happy reunion with Goku’s old friends, who he hasn’t seen in five whole years! He must be pretty excited, so let’s get a move on with this story!

Chi-Chi: (bending down and fixing up Gohan’s yellow tunic) Now remember Gohan, you must be on your very best behavior! You want these people to like you and not think your some weirdo, okay? That wouldn’t be good at all; they would think you’re like your dad!

Goku: (moaning, a bit upset. Is standing next to Gohan) Hey, that’s not nice! I’m not weird!

Chi-Chi: (annoyed, still working on Gohan’s tunic) You sure Goku-san? (Gets up) There you go Gohan! You look like a little gentleman! (Gohan slightly lowers his head and blushes) Don’t forget; best behavior!!

Gohan: Yes mother…

Chi-Chi: Good! (turns to Goku) Alright, I guess you’ll be on your way now!

Goku: Yay finally! (picks up Gohan and turns to the sky) KITO'UUUUUUUUUUN!

Just as Goku screamed, a puffy looking fluffy yellow cloud flew down to him. This is called the Kinto'un, or for short the Flying Nimbus. This was an interesting sort of flying cloud; simply jump on and tell it exactly where to fly! It’s that easy; but wait, there’s more! You have to be pure of heart to actually ride it, so if you’re a bad guy, the cloud will reject you, LIKE A BOSS.

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So that's it! Tell me what you guys think of it! KV-chan, can you please do a mini review for this so I know I'm on the right track?