User blog comment:KidVegeta/Prince Vegeta Saga completed!/@comment-3000576-20101106172950/@comment-3097771-20101106213043

Thanks for your lengthy post. I'll try my best to answer each.

1. You are right on this, moreso than I think you even know. In my haste to add the flashbacks last night, I forgot something I shouldn't have. As you may or may not know, I always write two drafts of everything. One is more of a skeleton design, which has dialogue and ideas that may seem out of place for that character. I put them there anyways, just because I know I can change them. In my second draft, I go back through everything and "fix" it. Now, yesterday, my laptop crashed, and that's where I had all my second draft dialogue for Lauto saga and flashbacks. So, yeah, I have to restart Lauto now... but the flashbacks, I completely forgot about them, and just attached the first draft versions. I'll change that as soon as possible, and yes, in the second draft, Layeeck is less hopeful.

2. Pretending to kill of an important character (of just killing him off)... I do not agree that that is unoriginal. Not everything goes as planned in my story, not everyone lives to a ripe old age... let's just say don't be too hasty in your assessment of the Benefactor's story thusfar. His character might continue to have "echoes" so to speak, things that bring back memories of him, to Ledas. And it's a fine line between the imagination and reality.

3. Here, I disagree. Immensely. I'm going by the english dub where a Frieza soldier, not Nappa, called up Vegeta to tell him the news. And if you look closely, the dialogue between Nappa and Vegeta isn't out of character. Vegeta actually tells Nappa to not show any weakness because "Your a Saiyan after all". Now, you may also talking about where he says "I promise". Something that he says, alone, to himself, directed at Ledas, with no one else around. Children aren't always perfect, and I think even Vegeta here had a hard time concealing everything (making it harder when he doesn't have to pretend for anyone). To me, that was, perhaps symbolically, the death of Vegeta, in the sense of him being "good" (a term I use loosely here). After that, it is assumed that he starts becoming what Frieza makes him. And you say there's lots of sadness, but the way I wrote it, and read it, it was anger, not sadness.

4. Frieza is a cold hearted killer. The Benefactor is a monster. There is a difference, and even Frieza has his limits as well. I think Zarbon and the other soldiers were more disturbed (Frieza was stated to be only kind of distured, very mild). Coming down it all, Frieza was losing his patience with the Benefactor's way of affecting his soldiers. And yes, I think Frieza himself, was glad that the Benefactor was gone, but for another purpose. When the soldiers are more afraid of another soldier than their leader, that can cause problems in commanding.

5. How so? Do you mean during SAA that he was screaming Frieza? Because I think any Saiyan would do that in that situation, just watching all their friends die. His personality actually, is a lot different the Bardock's. Take for example, King Vegeta's assault on Frieza's ship. Layeeck didn't participate in that at all, until seeing the killing. If anything, I would say his personality is closer to Gohan's.

6. Stardard procedure for Frieza's executions, that was.

7. What would you want me to do here? Put a quote at the start of each chapter? I'l add them in, but I just don't know exactly what you mean. -KidVegeta