User blog comment:KidVegeta/KidVegeta's reviews/@comment--20110124205257/@comment-396366-20110124212542

Here are my responses for reasoning.


 * 1) Written by supersaiyian11. I admit, that's too extreme.
 * 2) Premise of story. Okay, but the point still stands, as you should know.
 * 3) Canon screw ups. Fair enough, alternative timeline.
 * 4) Using my picture (which DD reuploaded) Thievery; you can just upload your own images
 * 5) Terrible spelling. I stopped paying attention, and I'm too lazy to check
 * 6) Terrible grammar. Same as above
 * 7) Terrible Plot expansion. That is not opinion. The entire story is rushed without explanations for things that just don't make sense.
 * 8) Descriptions of events seemed to be written by a drunk. I agree, but I'd put it in nicer terms.
 * 9) Vegeta would be 5 here, not a baby. I think he knows his own name. Indeed. This is more or less a timeline issue that canon-lovers just wouldn't be able to stand, even though the story is alternate timeline.
 * 10) Random old man (grandpa gohan) is a stupid inclusion. I think this could have worked, but you just didn't pull it off.
 * 11) Vegeta wouldn't spend all day crawling to his ship again... Yeah, he certainly wouldn't. He'd be too busy killing things.
 * 12) The identity crisis. Same as the grammar issue
 * 13) If this "The saiyans are a proud warrior race. They go around the universe and destroy all living things a planet." is all you got out of watching dragon ball, then there is no hope. Story-wise, at this point, this is actually how saiyans should be (so this is more of a pro-SS11 comment)
 * 14) Master Roshi's third person speech. Same as the grammar issue, again.
 * 15) Fight with Roshi was anything but "epic". Roshi should be killed instantly, assuming Vegeta is that strong (pro-SS11)
 * 16) If Vegeta could kill roshi in 2 seconds, it would not take 5 months to kill everyone else. It only takes, I estimate, a power level of 500 to destroy a planet. I don't think it would take five months.
 * 17) Why's Piccolo talking in third person now? Now this is just changing a character's personality. That's bad.  Very bad.
 * 18) How the hell did a jar even get on the beach? Didn't read into it, so I have no comment (similar to grammar issue, again)
 * 19) Even if it did, why would Vegeta find it? What is the point of this jar?
 * 20) And more importantly why did he open it? Yah, why?
 * 21) And even after opening it, why did Vegeta immediately shoot a blast at the creature inside? He only attacked Piccolo after he punched him I don't understand how that response goes with the question.
 * 22) Shouldn't his curiosity... you know be consistent? Same as grammar issue
 * 23) I'll tell you why. Because it's a horrible story. The worst ever. Thank god that it's so short because otherwise, I'd be ripping out my eyes by about now. I kind of disagree that it's the worst, but honestly, stop telling us to try to write the shit you attempt to pull off. We don't, because we know that it just doesn't work.