User blog comment:Hyper Zergling/HZ's Reviews/@comment-3000576-20110403000537

Late, I know:


 * Story is too rushed.

This is one flaw in my stories (excluding the one I'm in the making, Zarbon: Beautiful Monster) that I can't seem to shake.


 * Quotations are not in their separate paragraphs. Not only is this incorrect formatting, but it makes conversations very confusing.

Please include more specification.


 * Cell shouldn’t know that he can regenerate, since he learned it when he fought Piccolo.

I have no idea of what you just said. In a guess, Alternate Future Cell (IDK what to call it) never fought Piccolo.


 * Cell wouldn’t give 18 “five seconds to run”.

Totally agree. I'll fix it soon.


 * 16 should've been undamaged when they uncovered him.

In actuality, that's not necessarily true. He was caught in the warfare in the city he was located in.


 * Future Trunks achieves Super Saiyan 2 a little too early, to me.

16 was obliterated, and F. Trunks was training alot. This took place some time after he went back in time.


 * Dabura killing Babidi.

Personally, I see no problem with this. Dabura never showed hatred to Babidi up until this point because of all of the stress.


 * Dabura should’ve thought Buu was useless at first.

Please verify.


 * Trunks wouldn’t go Majin.

Personally, this wasn't my first choice. Future Goku was my first choice, but I let actual people chose...